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Dear Prime Minister I am an applicant for the Permanent Residence of Canada and writing to you in hope to raise some concerns regarding mistreatment of those applicants who submitted their files before February 27, 2008. Canada is a model of democracy around the world and her government’s actions are thought to be transparent, so we are waiting for such a long time with a dream that one day we can become her citizens. Now something comes up and our dreams have been shattered somewhat. Before February 27, 2008, immigration cases were thought to be processed in the order of their receipt by CIC offices, based on the principle of “first come first serve”. After February 27, 2008, someone was given the privilege to jump the queue. This really frustrates the applicants submitting their cases before February 27, 2008. This kind of action is unpredictable. Should we be punished just because we, very unluckily, submitted our files before February 27, 2008? We are waiting, desperately, for a few years just to see that others receive their visas in a few months’ time. The CIC officers shelved our files and took no glimpse of them again. No one releases any information about when the CIC officers will begin processing our cases or how long we will have to wait to see some progress in our cases. Dear Prime Minister, could this kind of unfair treatment be changed to give us a hope that we are sharing the equality and attention. Could the CIC Officers at least parallel process cases both before and after February 27, 2008 instead of only taking care of those received after February 27, 2008. Thank you! Yours sincerely,****2009-08-21
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回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！写得8错，支持！评论
回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！真好！谢谢lz!
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06年05月08日递交申请 08月10日FN 09年10月27日ME 10年01月25日MER 02月02日收PL信 03月08日香港取签2010年07月20日 登陆密西沙加[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！good writing！精神支持，没有记错的话，LZ已经在加留学了？值得一试！
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回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！写得真是情真意切，感谢气宇轩昂兄及各位有志之士的努力！我想只要有梦想就有希望，大家不能气馁，坚持到底就一定会见到云开雾散的那一天。此信给哈伯发了吗？~~~一定要发哦！！！
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回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！发哦
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回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！写的好!
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回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！最后一段的两句话是不是改用问号？信的台头Dear~后要加上逗号或冒号，冒号比较正式。
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回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！不错，若是雅思作文，至少8分
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09/05/26妥投悉尼 | 09/08/08屠鸭胜利| 09/09/01补料信到 | 09/09/08补料香港 | 09/09/18FN签发 | 09/12/11体检信到 | 09/12/25俺毕业了回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！DING!
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forever眼中的加拿大http://www.canadameet.com/member/index.php?uid=foreverhttp://www.canadameet.com/member/index.php?uid=forever&action=article回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！很好很强大的英文书信样本
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The only predictable thing about life is its unpredictability.最后一段的两句话是不是改用问号？信的台头Dear~后要加上逗号或冒号，冒号比较正式。点击展开... 说的对，谢谢！
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在安大略湖边，有个孤独的身影，在等你的出现。good writing！ 精神支持，没有记错的话，LZ已经在加留学了？值得一试！点击展开... 谢谢！已经在加了。
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在安大略湖边，有个孤独的身影，在等你的出现。回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！发到哪里去啊?
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06-4-21 FN;07-11-27 通知雅思;08-5-10 烤鸭（8.5 8.5 8 7.5);08-5-27 寄雅思(并交TEF 530);08-6-27 ME;08-12-02被通知贝雕，昏过去了。本人单身,27岁 自评76分,无亲戚,无加拿大经验。本科日语,硕士公共政策,博士经济.Dear Prime Minister， 气宇轩昂兄写的不错，俺在语法及措辞等一些细微之处加以润色，权当借花献佛，不正之处请指出。 I am an applicant for the Permanent Residence of Canada and writing to you in hope to raise [in hopes of raising your ]some concerns regarding mistreatment of those applicants who submitted their files before February 27, 2008. Canada is a model of democracy around the world and her government’s actions are thought to be transparent, so we are waiting [have been waiting]for such a long time with a dream that one day we can become her citizens. Now something comes up and our dreams have been [are]shattered somewhat. Before February 27, 2008, immigration cases were thought to be processed in the order of their receipt by CIC offices, based on the principle of “first come first serve”[on the first come first serve basis]. After February 27, 2008, someone was given the privilege to jump the queue[those who are on the National Occupational Classification list would be given high priority in their application to Canada, which means indefinite delay in CIC processing the cases received before February 27, 2008] . This really frustrates the applicants submitting [who have submitted] their cases before February 27, 2008. This kind of action [This hasty decision] is unpredictable [and unacceptable]. Should [how should ]we be punished [as a whole]just because we, very unluckily, submitted our files before February 27, 2008? We are waiting[have been waiting], desperately, for a few years just to see [only to find] that others receive their visas in a few months’ time.[those who have been given precedence enjoy rocketing process speed] The CIC officers shelved our files and took no glimpse of them again.[The CIC officiers have gone so far as to shelve our files and turn a blind eye to them!] No one releases any information about when the CIC officers will begin processing our cases or how long we will have to wait to see some progress in our cases. Dear Prime Minister, could this kind of unfair treatment be changed to give us a hope that we are sharing the equality and attention.[can something be done to improve current situation to make sure a fair play? Could the CIC Officers at least parallel process cases both before and after February 27, 2008 instead of only taking care of those received after February 27, 2008. [Can the CIC officiers rectify their act by at least paralling both cases received before and after February 2008 rather than only paying attention to the other? Thank you! Yours sincerely,****2009-08-21点击展开...日期不该写在这里。
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三千日夜吟愁赋，一亿白发尽满头。梦入枫林遍芳丛，觉来惆怅恨无数。 [[FONT=宋体]加拿大，请在不远的地方等我http://www.canadameet.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=263009][/FONT] [[FONT=宋体]起程-[FONT=宋体]献给[/FONT]91[FONT=宋体]旧政和[/FONT][FONT=宋体]新政的同路人[/FONT]][/FONT] [[FONT=宋体]一个等待移民者的内心独白http://www.canadameet.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=255315[FONT=宋体]][/FONT][/FONT]回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！发到国会山庄？
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===================Fight, Love, Make Mistake回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！修改后的一种可能版本。September 22, 2009Dear Prime Minister，I am an applicant for the Permanent Residence of Canada and writing to you in hopes of raising your concerns regarding mistreatment of those applicants who submitted their files before February 27, 2008. Canada is a model of democracy around the world and her government’s actions are thought to be transparent, so we have been waiting for such a long time with a dream that one day we can become her citizens. Now something comes up and our dreams are shattered somewhat. Before February 27, 2008, immigration cases were thought to be processed in the order of their receipt by CIC offices, on the first come first serve basis. After February 27, 2008, those who are on the National Occupational Classification list would be given high priority in their application to Canada, which means indefinite delay in CIC processing the cases received before February 27, 2008. This really frustrates the applicants who have submitted their cases before February 27, 2008. This hasty decision is unpredictable and unacceptable. How should we be punished as a whole just because we, very unluckily, submitted our files before February 27, 2008? We have been waiting, desperately, for a few years only to find that those who have been given precedence enjoy rocketing process speed. The CIC officiers have gone so far as to shelve our files and turn a blind eye to them! No one releases any information about when the CIC officers will begin processing our cases or how long we will have to wait to see some progress in our cases. Dear Prime Minister, we are wondering if something can be done to improve current situation to make sure a fair play? Can the CIC officiers rectify their act by at least paralling both cases received before and after February 2008 rather than only paying attention to the other?Thank you!Yours sincerely,****
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三千日夜吟愁赋，一亿白发尽满头。梦入枫林遍芳丛，觉来惆怅恨无数。 [[FONT=宋体]加拿大，请在不远的地方等我http://www.canadameet.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=263009][/FONT] [[FONT=宋体]起程-[FONT=宋体]献给[/FONT]91[FONT=宋体]旧政和[/FONT][FONT=宋体]新政的同路人[/FONT]][/FONT] [[FONT=宋体]一个等待移民者的内心独白http://www.canadameet.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=255315[FONT=宋体]][/FONT][/FONT] 赏 2009-08-21#19
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三千日夜吟愁赋，一亿白发尽满头。梦入枫林遍芳丛，觉来惆怅恨无数。 [[FONT=宋体]加拿大，请在不远的地方等我http://www.canadameet.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=263009][/FONT] [[FONT=宋体]起程-[FONT=宋体]献给[/FONT]91[FONT=宋体]旧政和[/FONT][FONT=宋体]新政的同路人[/FONT]][/FONT] [[FONT=宋体]一个等待移民者的内心独白http://www.canadameet.com/bbs/showthread.php?t=255315[FONT=宋体]][/FONT][/FONT]回复: 给哈伯的信，我草拟了下，大家一起修改！楼上的是高手。
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