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“见官死”开头之一:废话连篇不知所云(喷血指数:☆☆☆)   典型失败案例: Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?   This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……   修改方案:开门见山 直奔主题   In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。   Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information? (雅思真题)   Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life。   Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection  Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important!   “见官死”开头之二:中式英文人见人晕(喷血指数:☆☆☆☆☆)   典型失败案例: Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life  In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……   Topic 2- The population problem   The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there。   Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?  I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……   Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person  Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get “baoying”。   “见官死”开头之三:观点模糊态度暧昧(喷血指数:☆☆☆)   典型失败案例: Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?   I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……   “见官死”开头之四:偏离主题无轨电车(喷血指数:☆☆☆☆)   典型失败案例:Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? (雅思真题)   I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places。   “见官死”开头之五:语法错误惨不忍睹(喷血指数:☆☆☆)   典型失败案例:Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished? (雅思真题)   About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should。

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