加拿大外贸
客人的邮件如下：Hello ,
Thank you for the reply and i will like to order about 5000 pieces Remover's
but for now i will like to see free sample of it then make my first order ,
and in my first order i will pay for the sample...am looking forward to have a long term business partnership with you.
Regards,
我回的：
很高兴你知道你对我们的产品还有兴趣，我们有很多种样品不知道你想要哪种？
样品是免费的，请您提供给我们快递帐号，我们将会寄样品给您。
我们期待和您的合作
It is a pleasure to know of your continued interest in our products.
we have many kind samples,which do you want ,plz tell me,
and The samples you have requested are now available and will be sent free of charge.
could you offer us your courier account , then we can send free sample to you.
We look forward to doing business with you.
With best withes.
感觉自己回的不是很好，回的很死板，跟模版一样没有感情。大家能不能给点建议帮我修改下
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看他行文还不像以英语为母语的人呢，别费劲了
With best withes. 写错了，改成Best Wishes就行了
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给个参考：
thanks for your trust and interest in our products.
could you let me know which items do you prefer?
informing your express account number,free sample will be sent to you soon.
any qestion,just call or email me.
Regards.
看了下你的求助贴，你的太罗嗦了。简单明了砸单词都行。
建议你学习下如何给邮件减肥吧。
http://bbs.shanghai.com/thread-2664878-1-1.html
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Hello,
With great honor to see your continued interest in our products.
Please tell us the exact sample you like.
The samples you have requested are now available and will be sent free of charge.
could you offer us your courier account , then we can send free sample to you.
We look forward to doing business with you.
best regards
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邮件最主要就是能看懂意思就行了，其它的就是废话，多余的
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Nice day to you!
I'm glad to know that you are interested in our products and will place an order soon.
About the sample you mentioned in the last mail, I'm pleased to tell you that you can get our free samples but with chargeable freight.
About our products, there are many kinds. I don't know which one is you required. could you let me know exactly? Should i send you our catalogue or you may see our online website, ok? Please let me know, thank you!
Then about the freight, you know we are manufacturer, so we can offer you our free samples, but the freight should be in your side. Do you think so？Then, would you like to send us the freight or you offer us your courier Account No. ? If you like the first one, I'll send you our Account No., but it's more confortable to offer yours, right?
Hoping to hearing from you soon and wish a mutual cooperation in the near future!
Best regards,
[ 本帖最后由 viviyang 于 2010-8-10 12:04 编辑 ]
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Thank you for your prompt/early response.
Would you please advise which item you prefer?
The samples are free of charge and will be sent upon your confirmation.
Could you please let us know your courier account for sending purpose?
We are anticipating your early reply.
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It is a pleasure to know of your continued interest in our products.
we have many kind samples,which do you want ,plz tell me,
and The samples you have requested are now available and will be sent free of charge. 客人会理解为连寄件都免费。
还有客人都还没有确认哪一款，怎么说要求的款已经available了呢？ could you offer us your courier account , then we can send free sample to you.
We look forward to doing business with you. 改成 we look forward to the opportunity of cooperation with you in the near future. 会不会好些？With best withes.
总体来说，楼主的表达还是明朗的，只是太白话文。
修整下会更理想，呵。
[ 本帖最后由 penn 于 2010-8-10 12:26 编辑 ]
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确实太死板了、太多废话了。建议改改，以下是我个人意见, FYI：
Thank you for your interests in our products. No problem for free samples. Pls indicate the one you need as well as your courier account so that we could send them to you immediately.
Best Regards
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