加拿大外贸
我今年六月毕业，旅游英语专业，但是我想做外贸业务员，虽然朋友说专业不对口，挺困难的，尤其是应届毕业生，没有工作经验。但是我从网上看到，不少外贸业务员原本都不是做外贸的，半路出家的还不在少数。我的英语六级，刚够外贸入门（自招聘讯息而知），也有说英文并不特别重要，众说纷纭。我在工作的前三天按经理的吩咐翻译了公司简介和产品说明
我做完了，但是没人看得懂，因为同事都是做国内销售，英语好点的也就四级。大伙有时间的话能不能帮我看看，谢谢 。
原文，译文如下
----------机械有限公司 简介
---------有限公司成立于-----年--月--日，其前身是--年代建立的-----精工模具厂。自创立---多年以来，以设计、开发和制造优质的混泥土砖块成型设备而闻名，被誉为“造石先驱者”。其混泥土砖块和高强度铺路砖，路沿石等产品被广泛地应用于各种节能建筑和市政建设领域，同时，----公司非常关注建材机械制造事业的发展，注重给制砖企业提供最满意的全套产品服务。
顺应行业发展需要，---公司以准确的市场定位，专业的经营管理理念，依托卓越不凡的企业风格，于----年---月，在----经济开发区成立了国内生产规模大，专业化程度高，产品质量好的天津市----机械有限公司。新---公司占地80000平方米，是集机械设计、研发、生产、检测、销售与服务于一体的专业化机械制造企业。公司不断引进国内外先进技术和现代管理经验，制定了严谨的工艺标准，严格的质量控制体系和检测手段，研制开发了XSF-Y，XSF-Z,XSF-M型等液压制砖机械系列产品，----年先后加入了中国砖瓦协会、中国砖块协会等专业组织，使新实丰公司制砖设备从源头上得到了保证。
----公司现已专注于模具的研发与制造。----年---月，被天津热处理行业协会吸纳为成为会员使得模具品质更上一个台阶，模具生产运用数字化专业机床加工制作，让质量得到了保证，确保了每一件产品均达到了企业满意。生产了使用于桥梁、护坡、路沿石、步道砖、草坪砖、震压多联等系列模具和多种类型的板金模具、形状各异的压力模具等。
如今的新----不仅能生产混泥土砖块成型设备，还向客户提供高质量的配套模具、异型模具等产品，已经成为国内外新型墙体材料领域里最知名的供应商。
公司现已率先通过ISO9001：2000国际质量管理体系认证，生产的液压机械及装配不同模具，具有自动化程度高，一机多能，操作安全，节能环保、安装方便，故障率低等特点，产品销售遍及全国各个省、市、自治区，并出口柬埔寨、越南、泰国、菲律宾、蒙古、尼日利亚、几内亚、安哥拉等国家，全球用户超过几千家，在同行业中享有较高的声誉。
多年的实践经验积累和不断加强的科研与开发，使---企业为国内外新型建材设备制造领域做出了许多里程碑式的贡献。通过了解市场的真实需求而不断提供更方便、更先进的技术用以提高机器的生产效率，众多的客户提供的宝贵意见已经付诸实施。
今天，改革墙体材料，告别昔日秦砖汉瓦，保护国土资源与生态环境是中国的一项基本国策。----公司正积极参与中国这一伟大的墙改事业，愿为中国发展具有保护生态环境作用的现代化混泥土产业提供国际一流的技术装备。俗话说，“百闻不如一见”，---人真诚的欢迎您作全面考察，---多年的丰富经验将是您成功的可靠保证。
创新是----发展的动力，用户需要是我们永远的追求—
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---------------Machinery Co. Ltd. Overview
-----------Hydraulic Machinery Co. Ltd. was founded on -------, whose predecessor was ------------Precision Mold Factory, running in the ---- Over the past decade, we specialized in designing, developing and manufacturing high-quality concrete brick machine, and have been well-known as a forerunner of brick making machine manufacturer. our product, including including concrete blocks, high-intensity pavers and curbs, ect. are widely used in the areas of erergy-saving building and city construction At the time that(meanwhile) -----------are concerned about the development of Building Materials Machinery Manufacturing Business, we also pay attention to provide the brick-making enterprises with Full range of products and services.
In October 2005, complied with the development demand of the industry, We moved to ----------Economic Development Zone and were incorporated as----------- Machinery Co., Ltd. Rely on an accurate market positioning, professional management philosophy, remarkable enterprises style, ----------company is a mechanical engineering enterprise at the command of mechanical design , development, production, testing, sales and service with an area of 80000 square meters, which has taken a new look with larger scale production, higher degree of specialization, higher quality products. Through continuously importing advanced technology and management experience, we developed a rigorous process standards, strict quality control system and testing methods. ------------have developed Model for XSF-Y，XSF-Z,XSF-M type of block molding machine. In sequence, we joined in the China Association of brick tile and China bricks Association and other professional organizations in 2007, which made our brick-making equipments guaranteed from its source
Furthermore,--------- Company has focused on R & D and manufacture of molds and become a member of -----------heat treatment industry associations in July 7, 2007.Due to the application of digital production, mold quality reached a higher level and realized each product matching to clients demand. The blocks can be used in construction of bridge, slope protection，road， paving road，lawn，shocking pressure multi—joint，etc. and many kinds of metal mould，pressure moulds in different shapes .
Now, ----------is not only capable of producing Concrete blocks molding equipment, but also providing customers with high-quality supporting mold, multi-shaped mold and other machine. We have become one of most well-known suppliers in the industry of new wall materials at domestic and abroad.
The company has taken the lead in passing ISO9001: 2000, the International quality management system. Due to their features of multifunctional, high degree of automation and safety as well as energy saving, environmental protection, and easy installation, low failure rates, the machines of hydraulic machinery and assembly of different molds product do well in the provinces, municipalities, autonomous regions and exported to Cambodia, Vietnam, Thailand, the Philippines, Mongolia, Nigeria, Guinea, Angola and other countries. We have won thousands of users around the world and enjoy a high reputation in the same industry.
Decades of practical experience and continuous concentration on R&D help us make remarkable contributions to the industry of new building materials for manufacturing equipment among domestic and foreign companies. By understanding the real market needs and adopting the valuable advice from many customers, we continue to apply more convenient and more advanced technology in improving the productivity of the machine. Protecting land resources and ecological environment is one of China's basic national policies. To supports the policy, ---------Company actively undertakes the reforming of wall materials to discard the old brick tiles since Qin and Han Dynasties.---------- Company engages in the modernization of Concrete industry, taken advantage of world-class technologies and equipment to protect the ecological environment. As the saying goes, "seeing is believing" we sincerely welcome you to conduct a comprehensive inspection, and our valuable experience will help you achieve great success.
We eternally pursuit to satisfy our clients' needs with innovation as the impetus for our development
地理位置
---------模具公司
我公司地处京沈高速（北京到沈阳）、 保平(宝坻到平谷)两条道路的交汇处。这里距首都国际机场--公里，天津国际机场---公里天津塘沽港口---公里，秦皇岛---公里，交通四面畅达。
Company Location
Machinery Company
Company is located in junction of Beijing-Shenyang Highway and Baodi-Pinggu, which is accessible on all sides; say -- kilometers from Beijing Capital International Airport here,-- km from Tianjin International Airport, --- km from Tianjin Tanggu port, ---km from Qinhuangdao.
评论
我只看了第一段~~~
感觉有点啰嗦了,还有，pay attention to明显用错了吧，可以说aim to provide~~~
其中中文当中有很多套话，英文不用跟得那么紧的~~~
我也是应届生，先握一下手先~~
评论
谢谢！
评论
感觉比我强啊。。我都毕业快3年了。。。翻译从不动手，都是 机器翻了之后改。。别的不说，就你那些单词写出来也不容易啊
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已经算不错了吧，我也就是6级水平，楼主加油！
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需要 再简洁明了 一点点
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公司现已率先通过ISO9001：2000国际质量管理体系认证
我没怎么看过你这个行业的公司简介，不过我看国外一些大型公司介绍自己的时候，不会这样表达。如果非要强调自己过认证过得早，可以说自己哪年过的。
对应的英文也看了，个人不是很喜欢这样的表达。
可以到网上找一些大公司的简介，看看他们是怎么介绍自己的。如果你只根据中文来翻译，看得不过是语法问题，可是如果中文本身表达的方式和内容，就已经不符合外国人的阅读习惯了，那你语法对了，别人读着还是别扭的。
以上，个人建议。
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恩，很好的建议！
难怪一直看着有点别扭，总觉得没见过这样的英文。翻译不是件容易的事！
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