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大家好！ 这封邮件是我自己写的，发上来就是让大家帮我分析一下有哪些语法错误， 希望大家给予指导，因为老板说我语法有点错误，所以我想发上来让大家帮我指点出来，谢谢大家！Dear Ms XX
Thanks for your kindly inquiring, we are a big exporter of Juice Machine in Jiang su province ,as this line falls our business scope .we would informs you that we are a factory in Jiangsu. As it is known, Jiangsu is a larger manufacture of Juice machine ,drink machine and plastic machine. Meanwhile, it is very nearly from GuangZhou to Jiangsu.
Yelina. we are mainly produce the production line of drink water ,carbonated beverage,oil, wine and another liquid . the machinery include :Washing filling capping 3-in-1 machine ,the whole sets of water treatment equipment, Shrink -wrapping packing machine, Shrink Sleeve Labeling Machine. and the whole sets of plastic machine. hoping you can visit our website knowing more information about our machinery and our company.
The information of factories as follows:
If you have any question ,plz let me know,
Looking forward to visit our comapany in near future!
Thanks&best regards
Anna
这个是我的原版的 没有修改过的，请大家给予指导！ 在次谢过。
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重点是这一封，老板是看到这一封说我语法有问题， 大家帮忙分析指点一下。谢谢！
Dear Mr XX
Thanks for your kindly inquiring, in order to give you perfect price and most suitable machine, we need to get more information from you, the question as follows:
1.May i know that are you need sport bottle cap of screw?
2.We hope that you can send draw or picture of sport bottle cap , we can according to your draw or picture give you accurate machine and perfect price.
3.what are the bottles volumes?
Quotations will be send to you upon receipt of your reply .if you have any question,i am here to you.
We are looking forward to your reply!!!
Thanks&best regards
Anna
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期待大家的指教！！！
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Thanks for your kindly INQUIRY, in order to give you FAVORABLE/BEST price and OFFER YOU suitable machine, we need more information from you, the questionS as follows:
1.May i know that are you need sport bottle cap of screw?
2.We hope that you can send US dRAF or picture of THE sport bottle cap ,THEN we can PRODUCE according to THE drAFT or picture GIVEN BY YOU
3. the bottles volumes
我稍微看了一下仅供参考 你们老板英语很好呀
Quotations will be send to you upon receipt of your reply .if you have any question,i am here to you.
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LZ，首先我想说你这一句话一个句号不好吗！我一看还以为是一句呢。还有大小写倒是无所谓，不过你别一会大写，一会又小写啊。
May i know that are you need sport bottle cap of screw?
就看你这句吧，一句话谓语只要一个，我想你这句话的意思是问他要不要带帽的螺钉，或许这样说好点：Could you tell me whether you need sport bottle cap of screw？
呵呵，看来我们是做一个行业的！
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我还没看清，呵呵，你们老板真是牛！
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都是些小问题。。。又不是死人。。。就这样发过去了。。。
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是有点啰嗦了吧？
Thanks for your kindly inquiring, but we have to know detail information about the product,can you tell me the below questions?
1.you need sport bottle cap of screw?
2.can you send draw or picture of sport bottle cap?
3.the bottles volumes?
any question pls feel free to let me know,waiting your early reply,many tks
best regards
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恩，谢谢你的指点，刚才看过你的几个用词确实比我原来的要好，恩，我们老板才30岁，英语深不可测， ，在他手下干活，真的是脑筋脑汁啊，不过仍然谢谢你的指点！
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Could you tell me whether you need sport bottle cap of screw？
恩，记住了，谢谢你的指点，还有其他错误吗？真心请教。
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呵呵，多多学习，老板挺牛，呵呵所以有压力，呵呵。
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恩，短小精悍，还是你写的看着舒服，恩 记住了，学习了，谢谢你的指点。 我在多问前辈一句，邮件是不是越简练越好啊，而不是一句话说成老长。 是这样子吗？
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你说的也对，但是老板说了，我就的虚心接受，但是不好再让老板告诉我哪里出现问题，所以发上来让大家帮忙指点，希望你能在闲暇时间把这些小问题指点出来。谢谢。
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