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我的一天：A new dayOur company is so busy during this puriod that some of us were arranged to help produce air compressors, and I was a member of them. At the beginning of this behavior, I felt very exciting because I can do things for our own company, but with the time flies ,I found that if I help somebody do a job (just help him or her) he or she would ask you do his or her own job which made me unhappy.
I always think myself : if I must lose my kind-hearting that makes me fell happy and success in usual work. I am a new comer in the company, there are so many things to do and to study. The most important, I had never studied any knowledge about the international trade, so I had so much pressure so as to I fell so tired sometimes.
Everyday I have to remind myself that you must study new English words, you must read the book the international trade , you must practice spoken English, you must learn the products of our company and so on and so forth.
This is the first time I speak out my hearted words.......
我的外语不怎么行，请各位高手提出意见，谢谢！！！
期待进步，期待各位的宝贵意见~~~
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对自己有信心，我觉得你的英文不错。A new day
Our company was so busy during this period of time that some of us were arranged to help produce air compressors, and I was a member of them. At the beginning of this behavior, （去掉即可，不是这样表达）I felt very exciting because I can do things for our own company, but with the time went on,I found that if I help somebody to do their job (just help him or her) he or she would ask you do his or her own job which made me unhappy.
I always think myself （去除）: if I must lose my kind-hearted that makes me feeling unhappy and losing sense of achievement in usual work. I am a new comer in the company, there are so many things to do and to study. The most important, I had never studied any knowledge about the international trade, so I had so much pressure and I fell so tired sometimes.
Everyday I have to remind myself that you must study new English words, you must read the book about the international trade , you must practice spoken English, you must learn the products of our company and so on and so forth.
This is the first time I speak out the words from my heart/what i wanted to say.......
小修改，仅个人浅见。
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下划线的部分建议去除。
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我也来写写
Our company was so busy recently that some of us were sent to help produce air compressors, and I was one of them. At the beginning, I felt very excited because I can help things for our own company, with time flying ,I found that if I help somebody with somthing (just help him or her) I was trapped into his or her own job which bored me very much.
I always think myself : if I must lose my kind-hearting that makes me fell happy and success in usual work.(这句看不懂） I just came to this company, there are so many things to do and to study. It is bad that I know little about the international trade, so I had so much pressure and feel so tired sometimes.
Everyday I have to tell myself that you must study new English words, you must read the book the international trade , you must practice spoken English, you must learn the products of our company and so on and so forth.
This is the first time I speak out my minds.......
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lz你是用第一人称描述的对不对，那么有个句子应该是这样的：
Everyday I have to tell myself that I must study new English words, I must read the book about international trade, I must practise my oral English, I must learn something new about the products of our company, etc.
从上下文衔接来看，lz是不是想表达：
Sometimes I ask myself if I have to give up my kind-hearting that makes me fell happy and successful in daily work, as I spent so much time in helping other colleagues with their own job.
这样你的纠结大家就看懂了
[ 本帖最后由 rahmundsahne 于 2013-1-19 05:08 编辑 ]
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感谢penn，你修改的第一段，第三段和第四段我非常喜欢，关于第二段我是这样想的，我是否必须丢掉这让我不快乐的好心（多管闲事，我是觉得自己经常出于好心对别人结果自己却。。。）我才能开心，才能工作的更好~
谢谢你哦~~~
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谢谢你哦，我又知道了一些表达了，非常感谢~~~
关于你看不懂的那句话我是这样想的，我是否必须丢掉这让我不快乐的好心（多管闲事，我是觉得自己经常出于好心对别人结果自己却。。。）我才能开心，才能工作的更好~
呵呵，由于时间的关系，就不多说了哈，总之，感谢
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这就是我想表达的~~~
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haha刚才把LZ写的话发给国外的朋友看了，
他说没有不对的 ，不过我觉得表达方面可以简洁些 有些句子可以用连词连起 这样看起来会更好吧？
[ 本帖最后由 lian57 于 2013-1-19 11:29 编辑 ]
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A new day
Our company was so busy recently that some of us were arranged to help produce air compressors, and I was a member of them. At the beginning, I felt very excited because I can do things for our own company. however, as time flies ,I was in trouble. If I helped somebody to do his or her job, he or she would keep me always doing this job again and again. It made me unhappy.
I even thought to myself whether I should throw away my kind-heart or not. I just want to live in peace and happy I am a new comer in the company, there are so many things to do and to study. The most important, I had never studied any knowledge about the international trade yet! I have much pressure of work, all happened here makes me feel very tired.
Every day, I have to remind myself that you must study new English words, you must read books about the international trade , you must practice spoken English, you must learn the products of our company and so on.
This is the first time I speak out my hearted words.......
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要言简意赅, 这么多客户没心思看.
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谢谢你的意见~~~
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我只能说你真是太厉害了，把我想说但没能说的都表达出来了。
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