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关于胶带设计图，请参见附件。你之前要求标注部分用银色代替红色和紫色。但是因为包装袋是透明的，银色用在效果图看起来不明显，所以在新设计里面，我们用蓝色代替银色，你能帮我们确认效果图吗？Refer to polybag new design,please find attached file. You required us to make silver color instead of purple color and red color which you put a sign of.But because polybag's color is transparent,when we use silver color in the picture,silver color seems no clearly, so we just use blue color instead of silver color .Waitting your confrimation of the new design.
不知道我这样翻译正确吗？有没有更好的翻译？谢谢！
[ 本帖最后由 patty-chu 于 2013-2-26 11:49 编辑 ]
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Refer to polybag new design,please find attached file. 此句不通。
改：Please refer to attached new design.
You required us to make silver color instead of purple color and red color which you put a sign of. 多余的没必要说，直接说明问题。
改：Purple and red are used in the drawing for easy seeing
But because polybag's color is transparent,when we use silver color in the picture,silver color seems no clearly, so we just use blue color instead of silver color 进一步说明
改（接上句）：as silver is hard to seen from transparent polybag.
Waitting your confrimation of the new design. 简短直接。
改：Please confirm the new design A.S.A.P.
改后全文：
Please refer to attached new design.
Purple and red are used in the drawing for easy seeing as silver is hard to seen from transparent polybag.
Please confirm the new design A.S.A.P. Thanks.
另：楼主最好不要先写中文，再把中文翻成英文。一来浪费时间，而来生涩的翻译很啰嗦，并且容易产生歧义，导致沟通不畅。
虽然用母语思考的时候会感觉思路很清晰，问题很明确，但是翻译过程会很痛苦，而且问题多多。
[ 本帖最后由 fwsteve 于 2013-2-26 11:05 编辑 ]
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高手就是高手，谢谢！学习了！！！
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关于胶带设计图，请参见附件。你之前要求标注部分用银色代替红色和紫色。但是因为包装袋是透明的，银色用在效果图看起来不明显，所以在新设计里面，我们用蓝色代替银色，你能帮我们确认效果图吗？
Here enclosed new design of adhesive tape ,kindly check &back to us .
After checking , in our opinion ,the Blue one is better than grey .Yours previously request that the red&purple one need to be replaced in grey ,but the package bag is poly ,if you use the grey ,we are afraid that the effect would be not so well.
FYR
个人觉得你的句子很中式，其实可以把要点表达出来就好了，不要扣字句 ，那样有时候老外看的会糊涂的
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我也觉得自己的翻译很中式 看来我还得抓紧学习英语啊！！！！！
谢谢指点哦，好好学习天天向上！
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