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以下为两个版本的公司简介和文化，请高手鉴定哪个专业些，谢谢。1
Company’s Information
XXXCO.,LTD, which is located in Sha tou jiao Baoshui District in Shenzhen, was founded on Aug 8th ,2010.It is an owned state company with high and new technologies, the best equipment and lots of funds. With the model of combining parts production with development, our company regards customers’ trust as the enterprise’s best treasure and see talents as our strongest power. On the basis of guaranteeing quality, increasing service and sharing the mutual benefits, we will make Honesty, Practice and Creation be our concept , and make more efforts, do better and progress with the time! Customers’ satisfaction is our largest motivation!
Welcome all the customers to communicate with us!
We have a two-storey warehouse, which, including 8 producing lines, is ,in total ,about 3000m2 ,and we have equipped advanced non-dust departments and producing equipment:CMD55 Comprehensive Testing Instrument,E4404B Spectrum Analyzer and PNA etc.
Company’s Culture
Our purpose: Responsible for every product we have produced to make every customer satisfied; Hold the principle of customers being the vital, service being the first, quality being the preferred, honesty being the base, practice being the fact and running the company legally.
Our Goal: Get on well with our partners, struggle and create for the first 50 most powerful company in this line and make the best products in the line and finally share the success.
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Company profile
XXXCo., Ltd. is an international enterprise specialising in mobile phone manufacturing and assembly, established on August 8, 2010, located in Shatoujiao bonded area, yantian district, Shenzhen. With the total production area of 3000M2 and strong financial backing, we introduce the state-of-the-art facilities and technologies(such as CMD55 Comprehensive Testing Instrument,E4404B Spectrum Analyzer, etc), along with our experienced expertise team. By meaningful, sustainable innovation and the integration of technologies and design into our market-driven products, we engage ourselves to meet the unqiue needs of our customers and see the delight from customers as our ultimate abmition.
Company culture:
Our credo: To ensure superior quality of our customized products
To continuously pursue improvements so that we can offer more competitive prices to our customers
To build mutal-benificial relationships with our business partners and succeed together
To provide safe and comfortable workplace for our collegues, with considerate salary and welfare
To creat equal opportunities for those qualified, from recruitment to training, advancement and promotion.
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怎么没人啊
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就看了第一句。。。感觉第二的第一句写得比第一个好，因为大家都是这样写的。。。
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国有企业： state-owned enterprise, ambition 雄心
第二段更简洁
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。。。不能多看几句啊
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我感觉不单是简洁 第一个感觉很多用语都不专业 很别扭 很中国式 对不
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是很中国式，试着用些短语，用多种句式表达，不要把句子翻译的太直接，用概括性的语言就好了
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是啊 所以感觉非常不专业 对不
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感觉第二个就很专业了
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呵呵，这也只是我个人的一点意见，因为我也不是很专业啊，感觉第二个专业的话就用第二个
国有企业： state-owned enterprise, ambition 雄心 ， mutual benefit 互利 colleagues同事
qualifications 资格，那里不适合用qualified
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呵呵 问题是我感觉明显第二个比第一个专业 但有人说第一个比第二个专业 更易懂
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我又想那应该是中国式的易懂吧，呵呵。
这就很郁闷了 感觉和她是两个语言体系 分歧太大了
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呵呵，我是认为第二段要好些，第一段太直白了，像你说的你们有几层的厂房，几条生产线，多大的场地，直接用概括性的语言就可以了，不用说的这么清楚吧
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恩 内容是一方面 但我觉得第一个的英文表达太中国式了 不专业
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第二段
标题就比第一段的好 要么把两段融合一下
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